- No kissing of head in scene 3.
- No hand held walking away as ending.
- Removal of revrese technique due to confusion of going back in time.
- Both are in forest refuge in intro before they proceed to field.
WHEN YOU CAME OVER (LENGTH 5MINS)
PART 1-Introduction
LOCATION A: A pathway, HDB flat lobby.
LOCATION 1: Forest.
CAST: Girl
Flashing images of trees.../
Flashing images of HDB flats/
Flash, flash,flash of a figure(girl) stands in the field blindfolded hands holding textbooks. Hair flutters in air./, close up, look up of blindfolded person.
In view of legs running./
In view of her perspective, camera run towards a block of flats./
In view of her front, she runs and trips over something./
Blindfolded girl drops the books in her hands at the scene when she falls. She also begins to walk backwards.
In view from her level where she crouched after falling, she curses, wrenching her foot. She quickly stands up and runs off view./
She dashes at the landing of HDB, limping./
LOCATION B: *HDB 2 sided doorway landing, Weenies'
CAST: Girl and Boy
Close up view of doorway. She digs her handbag on the shoe rack beside the gate of her home and cursed when she cant find her key. She rattles the lock and tries to knock on the door but no one was in./
Side profile of girl,Is there anyone in? I need to use the toilet now!” There was no answer. She could not believe this. She takes out her BLACKBERRY, calls but no reply. She grunts./
Urgent for the restroom, her legs wobbled and twisted into a knot and she started to hop on the spot finding balance in that posture./
Further viewpoint where we can see both doors of her house and her neighbors'. She looked at the neighbors door, considering whether she should use her neighbors. /
LOCATION 2: Forest
LOCATION B: Dark Studyroom
CAST: Boy
Flashing Images of dark forested area. Trees and branches./
Flashing images of mouse, closed window, piles of work, cds./
Flash, flash,flash, close up, look up of blindfolded person. Knocking sounds lead into reality.../
He stirs and looks to the direction from where the knocking is from. We see that he is in a dim study room where the computer is the only thing lit. He rests on arm after awhile at his desktop as he finishes his stick. Bright light from outside screams for attention behind the curtains. (preferably silhouette shot)/
Puzzled he goes to open door she he walks off screen./
LOCATION 1: Chinese Garden Field
We see legs walking through thick greens, through tall lallang and soon into open grass.
We see girl walking backwards in other direction of boys.
Both walk backwards blindfolded and stops eventually inches from each other, facing back to back. Camera pans upwards into sky/
PART 2- Meeting
LOCATION C: Felicia's House
Using glass bottle effect to simulate peephole, we are in perspective of boy peering out at the girl fidgeting outside./
In view of inside the house, the door opens to capture girl's surprise when she realize it isn't the usual aunty but a dude./
From view behind the girl, He stared back at her. “May I help you?”/
From view from inside his house at her. Her voice higher than usual, visibly embarrassed. "I'm sorry I rushed out today and I forgot to take my keys and I need to use the toilet...” she smiled at him pathetically, holding her waist/
From view of girl, within the conversation, a glimpse of boy's reaction, looking at the locked door opposite./
From behind her, He does not look at her now, backs away to let her in. “Sure.” She kicked off her heels and scampered past him./
From front view shoulder up, she sits on toilet to 'relieve' herself, she looks around. She sees Soap bottles. An ivy green towel draped at a ledge beside a pair of jeans. A pair of toilet slippers. A magazine on the ledge. A shaver. A toothbrush in a cup. Singularity is being translated to the literal sense in following scene.../
Scene cuts to boy sitting on sofa alone and waiting, view front./
Same view, she appears/
View of her waist up, cam follows her. she is rather embarrassed but thankful.“I-I’ll go now.” she slipped her handbag onto her shoulder./
“Okay.” He stood up politely./
She turned and opened the door. That was when the umbrella holder adjacent to the door toppled down by her push. The umbrellas slid out in all angles./
He lunged forward. “It’s alright. I can”
“I’m so sorry.” She squatted down to pick up the umbrellas and broom but kicked off the stack of shoe boxes from the wire rack and it fell down too.
“Oh gawd...” She muttered under her breath. She wanted to kill herself. He must have thought she was a serious klutz.
But she noticed he wasn’t frowning. “It happens to me too all the time.” And the mess was cleared fast.
She stood up and opened the door. Peering out, she realised her sister still had not returned home.
“You can wait here in my place till she comes home.”
“Oh no, I’m fine waiting outside, I’ve disturbed you enough.” She said as she picked up her handbag again.
“No you have not.” He insisted.
He was too nice, she thought. At the gate, she turned back at him with a question that surfaced, “Doesn’t an old lady around her late fifties, white hair, and very chirpy, live here? I’ve never seen you before.” She said as she slipped on one of her heels.
“Oh you must mean my mum. She lived here but she passed on two weeks back.” he said looking at the photo of her on the wall near the door.
“Oh no…” She gasped again, covering her face in embarrassment. “I’m so sorry. I din mean to bring up-”
“-its alright.” He interrupted. “Anyway, I’m Eric.”
“I’m Cheryl.”
“Cheryl.”
“Yup.”
“You really should stay for awhile. I can get you a drink or maybe something to eat? I have tao hui jui.”
She pondered for a moment, looking sullenly at her own home that she was locked out of. She looked at him and he wore a look that made her smile.
“that will be nice.” She finally gave in.
She walked to the balcony to look at the view as he proceeded to the kitchen. She glances at him before he disappears into the kitchen. She turns and looks out of the windows.
“So, you staying here now?” saying loud enough for him to hear from the kitchen as she starts to walk.
“I actually live at Bukit Panjang. I decided to stay here to take care of my mum when she was in a really sick phase.” He said as he washes the cups and takes out the soya bean carton from the fridge.
We now see her taking photo frames of pictures baby photo, etc. “Now that she has moved on, I’m here to pack things up and plan on what to do with this place. I've been here for quite awhile already.”
“I have not seen you before.”
“I don't really go out much.”
“why?”
Pause. “I just dont.”
“So you’re selling the house?”
“Maybe. I stay beside where I worked. If I shifted all the way here, it would make no sense.”
“What do you work as? I'm still in uni. Final year.”
“I am an engineer. 2nd year into the job”
“Sounds good.”
“Yea.”
He brought a large cup of drink for her at the balcony. She smiles at him but he doesn't notice. The text 'It was a cold drink but it warmed her heart.' is on the cup. Camera turns away oddly and quickly to bring us to colour.
LOCATION 1: Chinese Garden Field
Landscape brings us to the view of the 2 back to back. She turns to face him. 'Eric' echos to reality...
Part 4-Talking Gets Personal
“Eric?”
Looking out, he turned to look into her eyes.
“Ya?”
From the back view, we look at them look out of the window. “You married?”
“I’m not married.”
“You... have a girlfriend?”
“Erm...” He chuckled and gave her a puzzled look. It was then that she realized the inappropriate nature of her question in the conversation.
After an awkward while for the both of them, he managed to murmur a “no”.
“Wow. Living all by yourself.” She said twirling her cup, “Must be really lonely...” she said as she walked towards the sofa to sit.
Eric looked up. Suddenly the flat was a void to Eric and he could feel the emptiness of its corners. Wide view of the emptiness as he stood alone in the balcony. Camera pans away into illusion...
LOCATION 1: Chinese Garden Field
Landscape brings us to the view of the 2. He turns to her and removes his own blindfold but to see her looking away, still blindfolded. View of his face, visibly upset.
“No I’m fine myself.” He glanced back at her, blatantly lying.
“Me too.” She said still staring into her cup, lying too.
There was a silence. She placed the cup down and began wrenching her ankle which still stung from the fall on the way home.
“Are you okay?” he said genuinely concerned, walking to her.
“I fell.”
PART 5-SILENT/WHISPERY PART
(SILENT SCENE)
He looks at the wound with concern and walks off.
Girl looks as he walks off. She winced at a sudden jolt of pain caused by her own wrenching.
He returns with a box where he took out some bandage and lotion. Foreground boy, focus: girl.
She was still in pain. He sat next to her on the right. She turned to him and propped her left leg on his lap.
He opened the pouch. He dabbed purple liquid on the affected area and wrapped cloth on her ankle. He smoothed the wrinkles on the tape out slowly. He watched her to see if he is hurting her. She is silent for a while.
She lunged forward, a silent wince. She grabbed his arm, wincing from the pain. A feeling of closeness affects him.
“Sorry...” He whispered.
“No, no...” She whispered back. She fell back again onto the couch. Her hand loosened and slowly slid off his. He gripped her palm just before it left his And their hands that held settled down comfortably on the couch.
There was a long silence as he continued to massage the area around the affected area. We see him see her. He is more careful this time. We see him look at her as she lay on the couch. A woman so close to him now. He forgot about the wound he was fixing as he admired how her hair flopped like frozen ocean waves on the couch. Her face read a beautiful grin. Camera moves to his face for awhile.
“Cheryl... You should have left the door open. Your mum might have returned already... Cheryl?”
She shifts listlessly obviously not listening. He realized she was comfortably lying back on the couch eyes closed and slightly smiling. Camera moves off her face to brighter blank wall...
LOCATION 1: Chinese Garden Field
From sky down, we see that she removes her blindfold. She smiles from view behind him. He smiles from view behind her. Camera moves behind his head
The sky should be a deep purple against the red setting sun.
We see a closeness of the two people, a sense of comfort from being together that evening.
We see his face looking out at a distant. A slight satisfaction and comfort can be seen from him.
In view of his back, we see him look out of the window. Camera pans to window and light brightens out everything, bringing us to the illusion...
LOCATION 1: Chinese Garden Field
Field shots/
The two walked away from the camera. Camera focuses onto the near grass patch. Blindfolds lay on the grass. Camera goes on filming till they walk off. Credits roll.
END
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